Me
Hey! I finished LT event!
My presentation went well!
During my presentation, spirit of Jobs descended on me.
The thing is, I concentrate for over 2 hours, so I got really tired.
I joined the after party, but I spoke Japanese only
I also need to improve my endurance.
Katie
Well done, I am glad to hear your presentation went well.
I also find it tiring to use English for a prolonged period of time.
Me
Really? Even if you live in UK for a long time, you think so!
Then it’s no wonder me, living in Japan, getting tired.
Please keep doing to give me lessons so I don’t get too tired.
Katie
Yeah sure. Consistency is the most important with these things.
他の改善点
プレゼン終わった！
発表は上手くいったよ！
話してる間は、英霊ジョブズが降臨してたね。（誇張）
ただ、２時間以上集中しっぱなしだったから、すげぇ疲れた。
懇親会も参加したけど、結局、ずっと日本語喋ってた。
持続力も課題だな。こりゃ。
長い間イギリスに住んでてもそう思うんだね！
それなら、日本に住んでる自分が疲れるのも仕方ないな。
これからも疲れすぎない程度にレッスンをお願いするよ。
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During my presentation, spirit of Jobs descends on me.
–> During my presentation, spirit of Jobs descended on me.
I concentrate on over 2 hours, so I really tired.
–>The thing is, I concentrate for over 2 hours, so I got really tired.
anywayだとそれはともかく、という意味になってしまう。the thing isで実をいうと、という意味
I joined after party, but I speak Japanese only
ーー＞I joined the after party, but I spoke Japanese only
I need to improve my endurance.
–>I also need to improve my endurance.
も、を入れるのでalso
Then it’s no wonder I’m tired of living in Japan.
–>Then it’s no wonder me, living in Japan, getting tired.
tired of living in Japanだと日本にいるのが疲れるという意味になってしまうので分ける
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