process of entering kindergarten

kindergarten Chat Style

My younger son is going to start kindergarten next year, so my family went to fill out the paperwork.
On the way home, we all played in a small park and it was fun.
I felt the time was passing slowly, maybe because it was in the countryside
It was a little refreshing because I was always busy and feel being chased.


入園手続き

下の子が来年、幼稚園に通うんで、その手続きに行ってきた。
帰りに、家族全員で小さな公園で遊んだんだけど、楽しかったよ。
(幼稚園が)少し田舎の方にあったせいか、時間がゆっくり流れているように感じたよ。
いつも忙しくて、常にに追われているような感じだったから、ちょっと新鮮だった。

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procedure for entering kindergarten
–>process of entering kindergarten

My younger son is going to start kindergarten next year, so our family went to fill out the paperwork.
–>My younger son is going to start kindergarten next year, so my family went to fill out the paperwork.
our familyではなくmy family

On the way home, the whole family played in a small park and it was fun.
–>On the way home, we all played in a small park and it was fun.
the whole familyだと第三者目線になってしまう

I felt that time was slowly, maybe because it was in the countryside
ーー>I felt the time was passing slowly, maybe because it was in the countryside

It was a little refreshing because I was always busy and always feel chased.
–>It was a little refreshing because I was always busy and feel being chased.

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